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The Name on the Shower Door by ~moonlightpoet1:iconmoonlightpoet1:





sliding her finger
across the glass
she writes his name
through the steam
on the inside
of the shower door

'i love you'
it says.
'why did you have to leave me?'
she whispers; words drowned out
by the hiss
of the hot water
racing from the shower head;

falling. hot tears falling;
water dripping
down her pink cheeks
she sinks to the floor,
choking on the thick
steam; she cant see.

her long brown hair
drenched and weighed down
stuck to her body; covering her eyes
she cant see
it hurts to breathe
'why did you have to leave me?'
gasping for oxygen
grasping for answers
huddled in a corner.

and shes crying; sobbing
calling out his name
for no one to hear

The hot water beats down on her
reddening skin
merciless drops of clear fluid pound over
her scars
her naked body
until she cant feel it anymore
until all the pain feels the same.

and the water is turned off
and the name on the door is wiped away
©2004-2009 ~moonlightpoet1
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Author's Comments

An agsty poem about love and sadness.

preview made with this lovely stock:

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:iconredkarma:
wow. what a really mature well written poem! The feeling is so real and the symbolism is just beautiful. I love the resolve at the end as you wipe the name away. Just to show that through the fog she moves on. This is wonderful! I haven't been able to read much tonight but from what I have read this is my favorite!

:+fav:

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:iconmoonlightpoet1:
thank you so much :hug:

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There is nothing either good or bad but thinking makes it so~Shakespeare:hprince:
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:iconredkarma:
I would have to say this is one of the best I have read from you. I love the other ones that I read and I still have more reading but you put alot of emotion in this one. You welcome and thank you for sharing :)

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Dick Cheney insists on links between Al Qaeda and Kevin Bacon. Al Qaeda was trained by the CIA which was created by Harry Truman who dropped the bomb which was conceived by the Manhattan Project which was a movie starring John Lithgow who was in Footloose
:iconshytulip:
this is very well written! :clap:

also, i wanted to kick that fucker who left her. :giggle:

i love writting things in steamy walls or mirrors...

i have never seen a poem about this subject!
:iconmoonlightpoet1:
hehe thank you!

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There is nothing either good or bad but thinking makes it so~Shakespeare:hprince:
~MoonlightStock~NewYorkgroup
:icondarthmarlan:
Nice piece, and well written. :)
:iconmoonlightpoet1:
thank you

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There is nothing either good or bad but thinking makes it so~Shakespeare:hprince:
~MoonlightStock~NewYorkgroup
:iconredkarma:
Now that is perfect! This really shows your talent... ;)

Nice choice of stock. ;)

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Dick Cheney insists on links between Al Qaeda and Kevin Bacon. Al Qaeda was trained by the CIA which was created by Harry Truman who dropped the bomb which was conceived by the Manhattan Project which was a movie starring John Lithgow who was in Footloose
:iconmoonlightpoet1:
thank you :hug:

--
There is nothing either good or bad but thinking makes it so~Shakespeare:hprince:
~MoonlightStock~NewYorkgroup

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